My life has changed colours
on your entry as well as the exit.
When I was asleep,
you were near, anytime besides.
Now, when I’m awake,
you are distant, nowhere to be seen.
Your smile that was once soothing,
now like a phantom, is haunting.
The cheery impulse we shared,
is now my lone seizure to be sad.
I’ve let go of some pieces,
but still holding on to many.
A day in my past,
I reminisced a future with you.
A day in my future,
will I ever forget my past?
Now that you’ve gone leaving me,
should I try, come and join you?
Not knowing if I’m alive or dead,
I’m living, embracing life as death.
I was cynical of life after death,
but now I believe, as you live inside me.
This is a free verse written with the usage of ‘Antithesis’.
Antithesis is a literary device used in writing or speech when two opposites are introduced together to produce a contrasting effect. I’ve highlighted the alternating pair of opposites with alternating colours.
This post is written in response to the ‘Saturday Mix’ prompt by Sarah aka Weejars.
The challenge – Opposing Forces – is to use the two opposing words in the response – which can be poetry or prose. Prompt words for this week are – asleep and awake & distant and near.
Loved this Anisha… I read this over n over… so many lines conveyed so beautifully ..
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A day in my past,
I reminisced a future with you.
A day in my future,
will I ever forget my past?
Beautifully framed
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That’s the first set of lines I framed for this poem. Glad that it resonated well. Thank you! ❣
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I’m so happy that these words kept you stuck enough to read in repeat mode. It’s a big compliment. Thank you very much, Happy Soul! ❤
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Oh yes it did! Pleasure is mine 😇
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Well use of words
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Thank you very much, Akshita! ❣
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Wow Anisha!! This touched my heart❤
“A day in my past,
I reminisced a future with you.
A day in my future,
will I ever forget my past?”
These were so beautiful!❣
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I’m happy that this poem touched your heart. So thoughtful of you to point out your favourite lines! My heartfelt thanks, Ishita! ❤
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The poem was splendid.
It’s my absolute pleasure Anisha!❣🤗
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Nice!👌👌
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Thanks a lot! 💙
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Beautifully portrayed and it’s commandable how you used Antithesis throughout the poem.. it must have been quite a task!
I liked it🙂
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Thank you very much for appreciating the efforts behind, Rashmi. I enjoyed writing them and am also glad that it appealed to you. ☺
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I enjoyed this poem even more on noticing later that you have used the opposites in every line, creating a wonderful contrasting effect. That is neat. Also the poem was deep, life after death in the memories of loved ones. Nice concept, well presented. Keep it up 🙌
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This is the first time I’ve tried something like this. Great of you to welcome my poetic efforts! I very much appreciate your gesture.
I’m happy that you liked the theme of this poem, and the way it’s presented. Thank you very much! ☺❣
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Beautifully written!! :)Would love if you check out my feed and share your feedback 🙂
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Thanks a lot! Sure, I’ll check out your blog soon. (:
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JUST WOW. I really loved reading the poem and was touched by it.
I also really loved these lines
A day in my past,
I reminisced a future with you.
A day in my future,
will I ever forget my past?😍🥰😃😊
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It’s so kind of you to point out to a favourite part. I’m very pleased to know that the poem touched your heart. Thank you very much for appreciating! ❤
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Awww sure I really liked it. Yessss! Your most welcome dear. 🥰😊
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Oh wow, Anisha. This is beautiful 😊
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Thank you very much, Shweta! 😊
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Wonderful creative composition Anisha 👌
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I’m happy to receive this compliment. Thank you, Mam! ❣
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